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the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.
the bar chart gives the information about which types of films were watched the most for men and women. While the pie chart illustrates the proportion of general ticket sales for various of types of films. Both diagrams refer to the USA in 2010. Overall, what stands out from the bar chart is that the most popular movie is actions for men and romantic comedies for women. In pie chart, actions was the highest ticket sales. Twice as many men said that they liked actions than comedies, at 40% and 20% in turn. In terms of actions, the number of men who liked to watch was much higher than for women, at 25 %. In contrast, women said that they spent on watching romantic comedies was six times as popular as that of men. Both comedies and western had the same proportion of men and women who liked, at 20% and 10% respectively. And regarding thriller and sci-fic, men said they liked watching was higher than women, at 15% and 10%, respectively for men, at 10% and 5% respectively for women Action had almost half proportion of general ticket sales, with 49%, making it considerably more popular than comedies, at 24%. This was followed by romantic comedies with 12 %. And thriller came next at 10%, which was twice as popular as other' s ticket sales, at 5%.
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the
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gives the information about which types of films were
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watched
the most for
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men
and
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women
. While the pie
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chart
illustrates the proportion of general
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ticket
sales for various of types of films. Both diagrams refer to the USA in 2010.

Overall
, what stands out from the bar
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chart
is that the most
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popular
movie is actions for
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men
and romantic
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comedies
for
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women
. In pie
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, actions was the highest
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ticket
sales.

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many
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men
said that they liked actions than
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comedies
, at 40% and 20% in turn. In terms of actions, the number of
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men
who liked to
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watch
was much higher than for
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women
, at 25 %.
In contrast
,
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women
said that they spent on watching romantic
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comedies
was six times as
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popular
as that of
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men
. Both
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comedies
and western had the same proportion of
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men
and
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who liked, at 20% and 10%
respectively
. And regarding thriller and
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said they liked watching was higher than
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women
, at 15% and 10%,
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men
, at 10% and 5%
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women


Action had almost half proportion of general
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sales, with 49%, making it
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than
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, at 24%. This
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with 12 %. And thriller came
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IELTS academic the chart below shows the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
228 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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