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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010. overall, it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased, while by stream increased over the v.1

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010. overall, it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased, while by stream increased over the v. 1
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010. overall, it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased, while by stream increased over the given time period. In 2011, about 55% of music were sold by CD, while at about 33 and 5 percent were sold through downloads and streams respectively From that year onwards, the amount of CD music sold, fell slowly reaching almost a quarter in the year 2018. Similarly, the percentage of songs sold via downloads experienced a decline, although it stops at above 30% in 2011, the figure then rose slightly to almost 42% in the year 2014 before falling significantly to 30percent at the end of the year. On the other hand; the rate of songs sold via streams continued to rise steadily over the given period of time to finish at almost 40 percentage in the year 2018 which became the highest proportion of music sold.
The
given
line graph illustrates the proportion of the total
music
sold by three
different
ways
between 2011 to 2010
.
overall
, it can be
seen
that the percentage of
music
sold through download and
cds
purchased
decreased, while by stream increased over the
given
time period.

In 2011, about 55% of
music
were sold
by CD, while at about 33 and 5 percent
were sold
through downloads and streams
respectively
From that
year
onwards, the amount of CD
music
sold, fell
slowly
reaching almost a quarter in the
year
2018.

Similarly
, the percentage of songs sold via downloads experienced a decline, although it
stops
at above 30% in 2011, the figure then rose
slightly
to almost 42% in the
year
2014
before
falling
significantly
to 30percent at the
end
of the year.

On the other hand
; the rate of songs sold via streams continued to rise
steadily
over the
given
period of time to finish at almost 40 percentage in the
year
2018 which became the highest proportion of
music
sold.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010. overall, it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased, while by stream increased over the v. 1

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171 words
6.0
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