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The maps below show how the town of Billiton developed over a given period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The maps below show how the town of Billiton developed over a given period
The maps display the changes that took place in the town of Billiton over a 30-year period from 1975 to 2005. In general, the most noticeable change was the replacement of wasteland with new facilities, which catered primarily to tourism. The basic structure of the town, with two main roads which were aligned in a north-south and east-west direction and intersected at the central area, and with a residential area in the northwestern section, remained essentially unchanged over this period. In 1975, the east side of town had only large stretches of unused land, but by 2005 the swamp had been remodelled to become a lake, and to its right a new restaurant had been built on the site of lowlands. A new path for cyclists had also been constructed to link the residential area with the east of Billinton. In the place of empty government grounds, which initially covered the entire southeastern part, were a tourist shop and a local museum in 2005. In addition, to the left of these establishments, a new public golf course had appeared near smaller wildlife sanctuary, which was only half the size of the original.
The maps display the
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changes
that took place in the town of
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Billiton
over a 30-year period from 1975 to 2005.

In general
, the most noticeable
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change
was the replacement of wasteland with
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new
facilities, which catered
primarily
to tourism.

The basic structure of the town, with two main roads which
were aligned
in a north-south and east-west direction and intersected at the central area, and with a residential area in the northwestern section, remained
essentially
unchanged over this period. In 1975, the east side of town had
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only
large stretches of unused land,
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but
by 2005 the swamp had been
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remodelled
to become a lake, and to its right a
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new
restaurant had
been built
on the site of lowlands. A
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new
path for cyclists had
also
been constructed
to link the residential area with the east of
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Billinton
.

In the place of empty
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government
grounds, which
initially
covered the entire southeastern part, were a tourist shop and a local museum in 2005.
In addition
, to the
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left
of these establishments, a
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new
public golf course had appeared near smaller wildlife sanctuary, which was
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only
half the size of the original.
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IELTS academic The maps below show how the town of Billiton developed over a given period

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