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The column graph shows the rate of consumers in three age group taking healthy food between 2011 and 2016 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The column graph shows the rate of consumers in three age group taking healthy food between 2011 and 2016
The bar chart compares three different age group in terms of the percentage of people consuming healthy food from 2011 to 2016. Overall, the rate of people taking healthy food fluctuated between 2011 and 2016. In addition, the figure for customers eating healthy food between 31 and 40 years of age witnessed a different trend with other age groups during this period. In 2011, the proportion of people eating healthy diets in the youngest age group stood at around 75%, which was the highest of three age group, while the figure for the oldest age group was the lowest, at about 35%. The percentage of people aged from 21 to 30 years old accounted for exactly 70%. Over the next 2 years, the rate of customers in the 21-30 age group fell rapidly to nearly 25% in 2013. By contrast, the proportion of people in the oldest age group went up dramatically and the figure for those in 2013 was approximately 2 times that in 2011. The figure for customers in the youngest age group declined gradually to 60% in 2013. While the percentage of people aged from 31 to 40 years old showed a downward trend from 2014 to 2016, the figure for other age groups witnessed upward trend over the same period. The figure for people in the oldest age group went down by about 35% from around 65% in 2014 to just above 30% in 2016. The proportion of people in the youngest group climbed gradually from 50% in 2014 to approximately 65% in 2016. The figure for customers in the 21-30 age group consumed less healthy food than that of other age groups from 2014 to 2016, which increased to exactly 40% in 2016.
The bar chart compares three
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from 2011 to 2016.

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taking
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fluctuated between 2011 and 2016.
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eating
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between 31 and 40 years of
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witnessed a
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trend with other
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during this period.

In 2011, the proportion of
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people
eating
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diets in the youngest
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stood at around 75%, which was the highest of three
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, while the
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for the oldest
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was the lowest, at about 35%. The percentage of
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aged from 21 to 30 years
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accounted for exactly 70%. Over the
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in the 21-30
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fell
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in the oldest
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went up
dramatically
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for those in 2013 was approximately 2 times that in 2011. The
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for
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in the youngest
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declined
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aged from 31 to 40 years
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a downward trend from 2014 to 2016, the
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for other
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witnessed upward trend over the same period. The
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for
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in the oldest
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went down by about 35% from around 65% in 2014 to
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above 30% in 2016. The proportion of
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in the youngest
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climbed
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consumed less
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than that of other
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from 2014 to 2016, which increased to exactly 40% in 2016.
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54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The column graph shows the rate of consumers in three age group taking healthy food between 2011 and 2016

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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