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The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v.2

The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v. 2
The given line graph illustrates the information about how many children’s books, adult’s fictions and educational books were sold over a four year period in one nation. Overall, it can be seen that the sales of children' s books and educational books climbed and the demand of adult' s fictions dipped. As regards children' s books and educational books, the selling stood at approximately 33 and 24 million dollars correspondingly in 2002. There were sharp growths for both of them to roughly around 42 and 32 million dollars until the end of 2002. After that the children' s books experienced a gradual rise in the sales for the remaining years to finish at just over 55 million dollars in 2006, which was the highest record of the whole span. On the other hand, as for educational books, having witnessed a mild fluctuation from 2003 to 2005, the sales finally swelled to just over 32 million dollars in 2006, making it the number second book in the rank. In contrast, Adult' s fiction entirely followed the opposite trend. Starting at about 46 million dollars in 2002, the figure being the top most of the opening year, 2002 to 2003 witnessed a rapid dip in the sales to 36 million dollars. Despite declining rapidly, there was a steady rise to 40 million dollars in the next year, followed by a progressive drop to 30 million dollars in the end of the term (2006), which meant that it remained the least popular book.
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children’s
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, adult’s fictions and
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educational
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were sold
over a four
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period in one nation.

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that the
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sales
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and
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educational
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books
climbed and the demand of
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#039; s fictions dipped.

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and
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educational
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books
, the selling stood at approximately 33 and 24
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million
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correspondingly
in 2002. There were sharp growths for both of them to roughly around 42 and 32
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million
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until the
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end
of 2002. After that the
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children&
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books
experienced a gradual rise in the
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sales
for the remaining years to finish at
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over 55
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million
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in 2006, which was the highest record of the whole span.
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educational
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, having witnessed a mild fluctuation from 2003 to 2005, the
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sales
finally
swelled to
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over 32
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in 2006, making it the number second
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in the rank.

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followed the opposite trend. Starting at about 46
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in 2002, the figure being the top most of the opening
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, 2002 to 2003 witnessed a rapid dip in the
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sales
to 36
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million
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. Despite declining
rapidly
, there was a steady rise to 40
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million
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in the
next
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year
, followed by a progressive drop to 30
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in the
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end
of the term (2006), which meant that it remained the least popular
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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