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The maps below show exports of rubber ducks from 2013 to 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The maps below show exports of rubber ducks from 2013 to 2017.
The line graph reveals information about rubber ducks, which were exported by three different countries (the USA, Europe, and the UK) over a quarter from 2013 to 2017. The rubber ducks are measured in units per thousand. Overall, the export of rubber ducks rose in the UK and Europe over the period given, while for the USA, it decreased. At the start of the period, Europe was the most prolific in export, which was replaced by the UK in 2017, and following that, the USA exported the least numbers of ducks in final years. Moreover the amount of export in Europe, it began at 30000 and slightly climbed up to 35000 in 2014 before plunging dramatically to about 22000 in 2015. At the end of the year, it peaked at 39000. Likewise, 20000 rubber ducks were exported in the first year, after which the figure fluctuated slightly and jumped up to a high of 30000 in 2017. On the other hand, the export of rubber ducks started in 2013 at about 10000. This figure, which reached a high of just over 13000 a year later, reduced gradually in the final year to approximately 5000 in 2017.
The line graph reveals information about
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countries (the USA, Europe, and the UK) over a quarter from 2013 to 2017. The
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rubber
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ducks
are measured
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Overall
, the
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export
of
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rubber
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ducks
rose in the UK and Europe over the period
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given
, while for the USA, it decreased. At the
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start
of the period, Europe was the most prolific in
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export
, which
was replaced
by the UK in 2017, and following that, the USA exported the least numbers of
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ducks
in final years.

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Moreover
the amount of
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export
in Europe, it began at 30000 and
slightly
climbed up to 35000 in 2014
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before
plunging
dramatically
to about 22000 in 2015. At the
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end
of the
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year
, it peaked at 39000.
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, 20000
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rubber
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ducks
were exported
in the
first
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year
, after which the figure fluctuated
slightly
and jumped up to a high of 30000 in 2017.

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, the
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export
of
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ducks
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started
in 2013 at about 10000. This figure, which reached a high of
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just
over 13000 a
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later,
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reduced
gradually
in the final
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to approximately 5000 in 2017.
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IELTS academic The maps below show exports of rubber ducks from 2013 to 2017.

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4 paragraphs
196 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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