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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island according to a survey of visitors Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island according to a survey of visitors
The two charts of a survey show the most common merits and demerits of visiting Bowen island according to visitors. Overall, high cost of living is the primary disadvantage of visiting Bowen Island. In contrast, most of them feel that the local people are very friendly. On the whole, people felt that culture, accommodation, scenery and the people are the primary pros of the Island. On the other hand, bad weather, high cost of living, entertainment and food are major cons of visiting the island. Forty-two percent of the people said they like the hospitality of the Island. Around one-third of the people who completed the survey said that the scenery of the Island was magnificent. Visitors felt that culture was slightly better than the accommodation at 12% and 11% respectively. Half of the people who completed the survey agreed that the high cost of living is the primary drawback of the island, followed by a quarter of participants said that the Island has entertainment problems. Subsequently, 15% of the respondents felt that the Island has bad weather. Finally, one-tenth of the participants had food problems on the Island.
The two charts of a survey
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the most common merits and demerits of visiting Bowen
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island
according to visitors.

Overall
, high cost of living is the primary disadvantage of visiting Bowen
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Island
.
In contrast
, most of them feel that the local
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people
are
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very
friendly.
On the whole
,
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people
felt that culture, accommodation, scenery and the
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people
are the primary pros of the
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Island
.
On the other hand
,
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bad
weather, high cost of living, entertainment and food are major cons of visiting the island.

Forty-two percent of the
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people
said they like the hospitality of the
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Island
. Around one-third of the
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people
who completed the survey said that the scenery of the
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Island
was magnificent. Visitors felt that culture was
slightly
better than the accommodation at 12% and 11%
respectively
.

Half of the
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people
who completed the survey
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agreed
that the high cost of living is the primary drawback of the
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island
, followed by a quarter of participants said that the
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Island
has entertainment problems.
Subsequently
, 15% of the respondents felt that the
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Island
has
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bad
weather.
Finally
, one-tenth of the participants had food problems on the
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Island
.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island according to a survey of visitors

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4 paragraphs
189 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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