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The maps below show a book store in 2000 and now Summarise the main information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant v.2

The maps below show a book store in 2000 and now Summarise the main information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant v. 2
The given maps illustrate changes done to the layout of a book store between 2000 and present time. Overall, it is evident that space for reading materials has been reallocated, with a clear reduction in that for fiction. The store has also been equipped with a new seating area and a new café. In 2000, sections for travel and new books were placed immediately at the front while the service desk was situated to the right of the entrance. Fiction took up significant space, being displayed on 2 sections, one along the top and the other along right-handed corner. Aisles for books about cookery, hobbies and art were notably smaller and arranged in the middle of the store whereas a section for non-fiction works was placed nearby. At the present, new books and books for travel as well as the service desk are still kept at their original places. Fiction, however, is given less space as it now is sharing an aisle with reading materials for art, hobbies and cookery in the aisle opposite travel reading. This also freed up the middle section for a new seating area, with tables and chairs. Another notable change is that non-fiction has been relocated to the area that used to display fictional reading, to the back of the store, which meant a new café could be built in its place.
The
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given
maps illustrate
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changes
done to the layout of a
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book
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store
between 2000 and present time.

Overall
, it is evident that space for
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reading
materials has
been reallocated
, with a
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clear
reduction in that for fiction. The
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store
has
also
been equipped
with a
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new
seating area and a
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new
café.

In 2000,
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sections
for travel and
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new
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books
were placed
immediately at the front while the service desk
was situated
to the right of the entrance. Fiction took up significant space,
being displayed
on 2
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sections
, one along the top and the other along right-handed corner. Aisles for
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books
about cookery, hobbies and art were
notably
smaller and arranged in the middle of the
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store
whereas a
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section
for non-fiction works
was placed
nearby.

At the present,
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new
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books
and
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books
for travel
as well
as the service desk are
still
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kept
at their original places. Fiction,
however
, is
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given
less space as it
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now
is sharing an aisle with
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reading
materials for art, hobbies and cookery in the aisle opposite travel
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reading
. This
also
freed up the middle
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section
for a
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new
seating area, with tables and chairs. Another notable
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change
is that non-fiction has
been relocated
to the area that
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used
to display fictional
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reading
, to the back of the
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store
, which meant a
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new
café could
be built
in its place.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The maps below show a book store in 2000 and now Summarise the main information by selecting and reporting the main features and makes comparisons where relevant v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
227 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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