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The diagram below shows how potato chips are made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.2

The diagram below shows how potato chips are made.
On the diagram is shown a process of making a potato cheeps. Firstly, a workers check the potato quality. After this, potatoes get into washer. Then potatoes are rinsed by cold water. After rinsing, potatoes are given in a peeler machine. By this stage, potatoes are peeled and a starch are removed. Following that potatoes by the bucket conveyor are got to slicer machine and are sliced into a slice. On next phase, sliced potatoes are went by the flat bedtime later to the deep fryer, in which it sliced potatoes on the Flat Belt Conveyor. After all these procedures fried sliced salted potatoes come to a 2 types of packing, tp the bag packer and bulk can filler, in which they are packed. Finally, we get a known potato chips. Thus, potato chips are came a several stages before they come to us.
On the diagram
is shown
a process of making a
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potato
cheeps.

Firstly
,
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a workers
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check
the
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potato
quality. After this,
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potatoes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into washer. Then
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potatoes
are rinsed
by
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cold
water. After rinsing,
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potatoes
are
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given
in a peeler machine. By this stage,
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potatoes
are peeled
and a starch
are removed
. Following that
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potatoes
by the bucket conveyor are
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got
to slicer machine and are
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sliced
into a slice. On
next
phase,
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sliced
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potatoes
are
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went
by the flat bedtime later to the deep fryer, in which it
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sliced
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potatoes
on the Flat Belt Conveyor.
After all
these procedures fried
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sliced
salted
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potatoes
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come
to a 2 types of packing,
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tp
the bag packer and bulk can filler, in which they
are packed
.
Finally
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a known
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potato
chips.

Thus
,
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potato
chips are
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came
a several stages
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before
they
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come
to us.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how potato chips are made.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
144 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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