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The diagrams below show how humans and plants interact to produce oxygen and carbon dioxide. Write a report for a university lecturer describing information below. v.2

The diagrams below show how humans and plants interact to produce oxygen and carbon dioxide. Write a report for a university lecturer describing information below. v. 2
The diagrams supplied depict the divergence between humanity and greens through how they produce oxygen and carbon dioxide individually. Overall, the process in plants much more complicated than the humans' comprising about four main stages whilst the humanity can do it plainly by taking breath in and out. In the first stage, the plant absorbs the sunlight and carbon dioxide from its surrounding by its leaves. In the next stage, the process proceeds inside the plant after it is watered. The process called photosynthessis is done by plant with combining the energy and carbon dioxide which is gathered by its leaves. Afterwards, the plant easily manufactures fresh oxygen via its leaves again. Finally the process in both animals and humans is the same with each other simply taking breath from oxygen and turning to this into carbon dioxide by taking out constantly. It is apparent that greens turn carbon dioxide into oxygen whereas humans do reverse process.
The diagrams supplied depict the divergence between humanity and greens through how they produce oxygen and
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carbon
dioxide
individually
.

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, the
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process
in
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plants
much more complicated than the
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#039; comprising about four main stages whilst the humanity can do it
plainly
by taking breath in and out.

In the
first
stage, the
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plant
absorbs the sunlight and
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carbon
dioxide from its surrounding by its
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leaves
. In the
next
stage, the
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process
proceeds inside the
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plant
after it
is watered
. The
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process
called
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photosynthessis
is done
by
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plant
with combining the energy and
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carbon
dioxide which
is gathered
by its
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leaves
. Afterwards, the
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plant
easily
manufactures fresh oxygen via its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
again.

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Finally
the
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process
in both animals and humans is the same with each other
simply
taking breath from oxygen and turning to this into
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carbon
dioxide by taking out
constantly
. It is apparent that greens turn
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carbon
dioxide into oxygen whereas humans do reverse
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process
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show how humans and plants interact to produce oxygen and carbon dioxide. Write a report for a university lecturer describing information below. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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