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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. v.1

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. v. 1
The line graph presents data on vehicle theft cases in Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999. As is obvious, car thefts in Great Britain were higher than that of other countries while this rate noticeably increased in Sweden. According to the diagram, roughly 17 transportations in every thousand were stolen in the Great Britain in 1990 while this rate was between 6 to 8 per thousand in France, Canada and Sweden. Automobile embezzlement in Great Britain steadily climbed till 1993 at which point 2% cars were reported abducted. With some minor fluctuations, car lifting rates in France and Canada remained almost constant throughout the years. In contrast, carrier stealing rate in Sweden kept on soaring and in 1995 this proportion reached as high as 10 in every thousand vehicles. Motor vehicle theft in Great Britain sharply declined in 1994 but grew again till 1997 to strike 2% again. Afterwards, car theft incidents in Great Britain firmly declined between 1997 and 1999 when it actually increased in Sweden. Finally, in 1999, almost 1. 5% automobiles in Great Britain and Sweden were reported stolen while it was almost one-third of that in France and Canada.
The line graph presents data on vehicle
theft
cases in
Great
Britain, Sweden, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999. As is obvious,
car
thefts
in
Great
Britain were higher than that of other countries while this
rate
noticeably
increased in Sweden.

According to the diagram, roughly 17 transportations in every thousand
were stolen
in the
Great
Britain in 1990 while this
rate
was
between 6 to 8
per thousand in France, Canada and Sweden. Automobile embezzlement in
Great
Britain
steadily
climbed till 1993 at which point 2%
cars
were reported
abducted. With
some
minor fluctuations,
car
lifting
rates
in France and Canada remained almost constant throughout the years.
In contrast
, carrier stealing
rate
in Sweden
kept
on soaring and in 1995 this proportion reached as high as 10 in every thousand vehicles. Motor vehicle
theft
in
Great
Britain
sharply
declined in 1994
but
grew again till 1997 to strike 2% again. Afterwards,
car
theft
incidents in
Great
Britain
firmly
declined between 1997 and 1999 when it actually increased in Sweden.
Finally
, in 1999, almost 1. 5% automobiles in
Great
Britain and Sweden
were reported
stolen while it was almost one-third of that in France and Canada.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. v. 1

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