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the line graph shows visits to and from the uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by uk residents in 1999. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevan v.3

the line graph shows visits to and from the uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by uk residents in 1999.
The line graph illustrates the number of visitors to and from UK over a 20 year period from 1979 to 1999, while the bar chart provides data regarding popular destinations among the UK residents in 1999. Units measured in millions if visitors. Overall it can be seen that number of travelers increased as years goes by and France was the most Favourite country to visit by UK residents. In the line graph, to begin with, in 1979 almost similar number of visitors were there to and from UK at around 10 million. However the number of visitors to UK showed a slow and steady rise throughout given 20 year period, while the abroad visits by UK residents risen dramatically to reach about 53 millions, even though the growth of number of visitors was slow until 1985. At the end of given period [ 1999 ] almost double the number of UK residents visited other countries than the number of people welcomed by UK. In the second graph it is obvious that France was the most favourite country to visit by UK residents at approximately 12 millions of visitors, closely followed by Spain with around 10 million visitors in 1999. Turkey was the least preferred holiday destination by UK people [2. 5 million visitors ]. Interestingly the number of visitors to France in 1999 exceeds the combined number of visitors to Turkey, Greek and USA.
The line graph illustrates the
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in 1999. Units measured in
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if
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country to visit by UK residents.

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visited other countries than the
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welcomed by UK.

In the second graph it is obvious that France was the most
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at approximately 12
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followed by Spain with around 10
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in 1999. Turkey was the least preferred holiday destination by UK
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to France in 1999 exceeds the combined
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to Turkey, Greek and USA.
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IELTS academic the line graph shows visits to and from the uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by uk residents in 1999.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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