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The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportswear company in one year. v.1

The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportswear company in one year. v. 1
The column graph compares sales volume of trainer shoes in a year manufactures by a company. Overall, Flying boots, a trainer footwear type, that was launched at the starting of the year became popular while Golden feet dominated the market share in terms of its sale ratio. As is presented in the illustration, the sportswear company sold four types of trainer footwear throughout the year and the first quarter was dominated by the Golden feet and Zed runner shoes as they each made approximately one-third of the total sales. The newly launched trainers Flying boots brought around 15% businesses for this sportswear company. During the second quarter, the sales proportion of Flying boots increased to 32% while sales of Golden feet made one-third. Sales quota of High roller shrank considerably and the newly launched brand made the highest sale during the third quarter. With a declining sales ratio throughout the third quarter, Golden feet’s demand raised in the last quarter of the year while Flying boots made the second largest sales. Interestingly, other two trainer shoe models contributed to less than 20% sales of this company in the last quarter.
The column graph compares
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sales
volume of
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trainer
shoes in a
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year
manufactures by a
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company
.
Overall
,
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Flying
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boots
, a
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trainer
footwear type, that
was launched
at the starting of the
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year
became popular while
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Golden
feet dominated the market share in terms of its
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sale
ratio.

As
is presented
in the illustration, the sportswear
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company
sold four types of
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trainer
footwear throughout the
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year
and the
first
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quarter
was dominated
by the
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Golden
feet and Zed runner shoes as they each made approximately one-third of the total
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sales
. The
newly
launched
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trainers
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Flying
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boots
brought around 15% businesses for this sportswear
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company
. During the second
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quarter
, the
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sales
proportion of
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Flying
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boots
increased to 32% while
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sales
of
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Golden
feet made one-third.
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quota of High roller shrank
considerably
and the
newly
launched brand made the highest
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sale
during the third
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quarter
. With a declining
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sales
ratio throughout the third
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quarter
,
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Golden
feet’s demand raised in the last
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quarter
of the
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year
while
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Flying
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boots
made the second largest
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sales
.
Interestingly
, other two
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trainer
shoe models contributed to less than 20%
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sales
of this
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company
in the last
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quarter
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportswear company in one year. v. 1

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2 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
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