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The line graph shows burglaries per thousand vehicles in four countries between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The line graph shows burglaries per thousand vehicles in four countries between 2000 and 2009.
The line graph illustrates data on burglaries occurs in Great Britain, Greece, Spain, and Norway from 2000 to 2009. It is notable burglaries in Great Britain were higher than other countries while this rate had increased in Greece since 2005. According to the graph, 20 thousand were burglaries in Great Britain in 2006 while this rate was from 5 to 12 per thousand in Greece, Spain, and Norway. In great Britain vehicles, burglaries were 20 thousand in 2002 and steadily decrease to 15 thousand in 2004 but then reach to 20 thousand in 2006. finally, the rate had fallen again to 15 thousand in 2008. Vehicles burglaries had sharply reduced from 2005 to 2009 (14 to 4 per thousand respectively) in Spain. In contrast, vehicles burglaries increase during 2005 to 2009 from 9 to 13 per thousand respectively. In Norway vehicles burglaries had the stable rate of 5 thousand from 2003 to 2007; however, in 2007 rate jumps to 6 thousand.
The line graph illustrates data on
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burglaries
occurs in
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Britain, Greece, Spain, and Norway from 2000 to 2009.

It is notable
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burglaries
in
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Great
Britain were higher than other countries while this
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rate
had increased in Greece since 2005.

According to the graph, 20 thousand were
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burglaries
in
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Great
Britain in 2006 while this
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rate
was from 5 to 12 per thousand in Greece, Spain, and Norway.

In
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great Britain
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vehicles
,
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burglaries
were 20 thousand in 2002 and
steadily
decrease to 15 thousand in 2004
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but
then reach to 20 thousand in 2006.
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finally
, the
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rate
had fallen again to 15 thousand in
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2008. Vehicles
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burglaries
had
sharply
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reduced
from 2005 to 2009 (14 to 4 per thousand
respectively
) in Spain.
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,
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vehicles
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burglaries
increase during 2005 to 2009 from 9 to 13 per thousand
respectively
.

In Norway
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vehicles
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burglaries
had the stable
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rate
of 5 thousand from 2003 to 2007;
however
, in 2007
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rate
jumps to 6 thousand.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows burglaries per thousand vehicles in four countries between 2000 and 2009.

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6.0
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