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The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001 v.2

The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001 v. 2
The line graph and the table give information about the number of foreign tours that the UK citizens took place for 4 distinct purposes from 1992 to 2001. Overall, it is clear that the UK people prefered traveling abroad on holidays to the remaining reasons. Besides, the number of trips was the highest in the UK in the 1989-2001 period. At the starting point in 1989, the holidays was the major reason why people traveled abroad with 30 million trips, which was significantly higher than other reasons, roughly 8 million trips for the business, around 5 million trips for the family visits and the other purposes. In spite of a sharp decreasing trend from 1998, the figure of the holidays was approximately 40 million journeys, compared to 12 million trips for the family visits and 8 million trips for the business and about 2 million trips for other purposes. Additionally, it is clear that the total number of trips had a dramatic growth from 47 million in 1989 to 73. 5 million in 1998, which was the highest figure in the table. Nevertheless, the figure suddenly dropped to 61 in 2001 along with the rapid decrease of tours for the holidays.
The line graph and the table give information about the number of foreign tours that the UK citizens took place for 4 distinct purposes from 1992 to 2001.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the UK
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people
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prefered
traveling abroad on
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holidays
to the remaining reasons.
Besides
, the number of
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trips
was the highest in the UK in the 1989-2001 period.

At the starting point in 1989, the
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holidays
was the major reason why
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people
traveled abroad with 30
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million
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trips
, which was
significantly
higher than other reasons, roughly 8
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million
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trips
for the business, around 5
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million
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trips
for the family visits and the other purposes.
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In spite of
a sharp decreasing trend from 1998, the figure of the
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holidays
was approximately 40
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million
journeys, compared to 12
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million
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trips
for the family visits and 8
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million
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trips
for the business and about 2
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million
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trips
for other purposes.

Additionally
, it is
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clear
that the total number of
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trips
had a dramatic growth from 47
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million
in 1989 to 73. 5
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million
in 1998, which was the highest figure in the table.
Nevertheless
, the figure
suddenly
dropped to 61 in 2001 along with the rapid decrease of tours for the
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holidays
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of trips to other countries by UK residents for various purposes between 1989 and 2001 v. 2

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4 paragraphs
201 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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