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the chart below shows the percentage of male and female who did various free-time activities in England in 2006 v.2

the chart below shows the percentage of male and female who did various free-time activities in England in 2006 v. 2
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of people who spend their leisure time on different activities by genders in England in 2006. Overall, while watching TV group had the highest figures for both genders, the lowest figure was playing computer games. The percentage of women who were in the spending time with friends and shopping categories were higher than that of men, whereas men were higher than in the remaining categories. In 2006, about 85% of women spent their time on watching TV, which was slightly lower than that of men by nearly 2%. While the percentage of women who spent time with friends and shopping were at roughly 85% and 75%, those of men were lower, at around 80% and 35%, respectively. In addition, the percentage of English men who liked doing sport/exercise and reading in their free-time was around 75%, which was higher that of the counterparts, at roughly 70%. It was around 73% of the male groups interested in using the Internet, while the remaining gender was just around 45%. Finally, only 10% of men was in the playing computer games group compared to 5% of women.
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of
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activities by genders in England in 2006.

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women
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were in the spending
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with friends and shopping categories were higher than that of
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were higher than in the remaining categories.

In 2006, about 85% of
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spent their
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on watching TV, which was
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men
by
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2%. While the percentage of
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women
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who
spent
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with friends and shopping were at roughly 85% and 75%, those of
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men
were lower, at
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around
80% and 35%,
respectively
.

In addition
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men
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liked doing sport/exercise and reading in their free-time was
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around
75%, which was higher that of the counterparts, at roughly 70%. It was
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73% of the male groups interested in using the Internet, while the remaining gender was
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10% of
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was in the playing computer games group compared to 5% of
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women
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IELTS academic the chart below shows the percentage of male and female who did various free-time activities in England in 2006 v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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