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The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national andinternational fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national an v.2

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national andinternational fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national an v. 2
The line graph illustrates the average amount of money spent yearly on mobile phones, national and international landline phones in the US over a period of 9 years. It is clear that while the yearly spending on mobile phones increased significantly, the opposite was true for national landline phone expenditure. Also, the figure for international fixed-line service was lowest during the period. In 2001, there was an average of nearly $700 spent on national landline phones by US residents, in comparison with only around $200 each on mobile phones and international landline services. Over the next five years, the average amount poured into national fixed-line phones fell by approximately $200. By constrast, yearly spending on cell phones witnessed a significant increase of roughly $300. At the same time, the figure for overseas landline services fluctuated slightly below $300. In 2006, US consumers spent the same amount of money on mobile and national fixed-line services, with just over $500 on each. From the year 2006 onwards, it can be seen that the average yearly expenditure on mobile phones surpassed that on national fixed-line phones and mobile phones became the most common means of communication. To be specific, yearly spending on mobile phone services increased to nearly $750 in the last year, while the figure for national landline phone ones decreased to about $400 at the end of the period. During the same period, there was a stability in the figure for overseas phone calls.
The line graph illustrates the
average
amount of money spent
yearly
on mobile
phones
,
national
and

international
landline
phones
in the US over a period of 9 years.

It is
clear
that while the
yearly
spending on mobile
phones
increased
significantly
, the opposite was true

for
national
landline
phone
expenditure.
Also
, the
figure
for international
fixed
-line service was lowest

during
the period.

In 2001, there was an
average
of
nearly
$700 spent on
national
landline
phones
by US residents, in

comparison
with
only
around $200 each on mobile
phones
and international landline services. Over
the


next
five years, the
average
amount poured into
national
fixed
-line
phones
fell by approximately $200.

By
constrast
,
yearly
spending on cell
phones
witnessed a significant increase of roughly $300. At
the


same
time, the
figure
for overseas landline services fluctuated
slightly
below $300.

In 2006, US consumers spent the same amount of money on mobile and
national
fixed
-line services,

with
just
over $500 on each. From the year 2006 onwards, it can be
seen
that the
average
yearly


expenditure on mobile
phones
surpassed that on
national
fixed
-line
phones
and mobile
phones
became

the
most common means of communication. To be specific,
yearly
spending on mobile
phone
services


increased to
nearly
$750 in the last year, while the
figure
for
national
landline
phone
ones decreased to

about
$400 at the
end
of the period. During the same period, there was a stability in the
figure
for


overseas
phone
calls.
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