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The line graph shows the number of people affected by rift valley fever in three countries in 1915 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The line graph shows the number of people affected by rift valley fever in three countries in 1915
The line graph compares three countries, namely Japan, Mexico and Brazil in terms of the number of people who was infected by rift valley fever in 1915. Overall, while the number of people in Brazil followed an upward pattern, the figure for people in Japan and Mexican showed opposite pattern over the period shown. In addition, the figure for Mexican was seen fluctuation during 12 months in 1915. In January 1915, the number of people affected by rift valley fever in Brazil stood at 200 people, which was the lowest of three countries. By contrast, the figure for Japanese was the highest, which was around 1500 people. The number of people in Mexico was infected by rift valley fever just over 800 people. From January 19915 to December 1915, the number of people in Japan reduced significantly, the figure for Brazil increased considerably. The figure for Japan declined to exactly 800 people in May, remaining at 800 for the next 3 months, after falling to slightly under 200 people in December. By contrast, the number of residents in Brazil jumped to 1000 people in May, after rising gradually to about 1500 people in December. The figure for Mexicans fluctuated in 1915, which reached a peak at nearly 1200 people in April, while it was the lowest of three countries in December, with under 200 people.
The line graph compares three countries,
namely
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Japan
, Mexico and Brazil in terms of the
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number
of
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people
who
was infected
by rift valley fever in 1915.

Overall
, while the
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number
of
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people
in Brazil followed an upward pattern, the
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figure
for
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people
in
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Japan
and Mexican
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showed
opposite pattern over the period shown.
In addition
, the
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figure
for Mexican was
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seen
fluctuation during 12 months in 1915.

In January 1915, the
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number
of
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people
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affected
by rift valley fever in Brazil stood at 200
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people
, which was the lowest of three countries. By contrast, the
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figure
for Japanese was the highest, which was around 1500
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people
. The
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number
of
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people
in Mexico
was infected
by rift valley fever
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just
over 800
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people
.

From January 19915 to December 1915, the
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number
of
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people
in
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Japan
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reduced
significantly
, the
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figure
for Brazil increased
considerably
. The
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figure
for
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Japan
declined to exactly 800
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people
in May, remaining at 800 for the
next
3 months, after falling to
slightly
under 200
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people
in December. By contrast, the
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number
of residents in Brazil jumped to 1000
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people
in May, after rising
gradually
to about 1500
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people
in December. The
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figure
for Mexicans fluctuated in 1915, which reached a peak at
nearly
1200
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people
in April, while it was the lowest of three countries in December, with under 200
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people
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of people affected by rift valley fever in three countries in 1915

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4 paragraphs
225 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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