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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.4

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
The line graph illustrates, the information of, how the average monthly temperature varies in three different countries namely, Paris, Dubai, and Sydney over a year. Units are measured in temperature in degree Celsius. Overall, it has been clear from the chart that, Dubai experiencing the highest temperature during July and August and this country was on top temperature among the given countries. While, Paris was the lowest temperature in most of the months though, peak temperature time was n July and august. Sydney has the highest temperature from January to March which is, approximately 23 degree Celsius, while, the temperature plummet to around 13 degree Celsius in July. Whereas, after July, the trend shows upward and exceeding the temperature of Paris on September and increased to more than 20 degree Celsius by December. Moreover, in December, Sydney experiencing the highest temperature among other given countries. In January, the temperature of Dubai was below 20 degree Celsius which went up on the following months reached at the peak on August and September with above 35 degree Celsius. Then, there was a slight decline in temperature and dramatically reached to around 21 degree Celsius in December. Similarly, Paris started the temperature with mere 5 degree Celsius and there was a noticeable surge in temperature on consecutive months, then touched to 20 degree Celsius during the month of July and august. Then the figure tumbled to the beginning Celsius with 5 degree.
The line graph illustrates, the information of, how the average monthly
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temperature
varies in three
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different
countries
namely
, Paris, Dubai, and Sydney over a year. Units
are measured
in
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temperature
in
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degree
Celsius.

Overall
, it has been
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clear
from the chart that, Dubai experiencing the highest
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temperature
during July and August and this country was on top
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temperature
among the
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given
countries. While, Paris was the lowest
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temperature
in most of the
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months
though, peak
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temperature
time was n July and august.

Sydney has the highest
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temperature
from January to March which is, approximately 23
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degree
Celsius, while, the
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temperature
plummet to around 13
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degree
Celsius in July. Whereas, after July, the trend
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shows
upward and exceeding the
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temperature
of Paris on September and increased to more than 20
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degree
Celsius by December.
Moreover
, in December, Sydney experiencing the highest
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temperature
among other
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given
countries.

In January, the
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temperature
of Dubai was below 20
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degree
Celsius which went up on the following
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months
reached at the peak on August and September with above 35
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degree
Celsius. Then, there was a slight decline in
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temperature
and
dramatically
reached to around 21
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degree
Celsius in December.
Similarly
, Paris
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started
the
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temperature
with mere 5
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degree
Celsius and there was a noticeable surge in
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temperature
on consecutive
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months
, then touched to 20
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degree
Celsius during the
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month
of July and august. Then the figure tumbled to the beginning Celsius with 5
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degree
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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