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The line graph below provides the number of international conferences in three cities from 1965 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The line graph below provides the number of international conferences in three cities from 1965 to 2010.
The presented chart compares 3 cities in terms of global meetings they organized between 1965 and 2010. Overall, international conferences were held in all cities over the period. In addition, while the figures for city A and city B generally decreased, there was an opposite trend in that of city C. Turning into detail, 35 foreign meetings were organized in city A in 1965, which was a bit higher than a more-than-30-conference number of city B. In the next 20 years, while the figure for city B declined gradually to exactly 25 conferences, that of city A fell sharply to 20 meetings in 1975 before growing substantially by 10 conferences in 1985. Throughout the remainders of the period, oscillation were witnessed in both the number for city A and city B, remaining at over 20 and 25 conferences, respectively. Regarding to city C, starting at only 5, its number of international meetings doubled in 1975. The figure grew considerably to more than 25 conferences in the next 20 years. It declined slightly before reaching the peak of 30 meetings in 2010, surpassing two remaining cities as the most popular venue for global conferences among three surveyed hosts.
The presented chart compares 3
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cities
in terms of global
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meetings
they organized between 1965 and 2010.

Overall
, international
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conferences
were held
in all
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cities
over the period.
In addition
, while the figures for city A and city B
generally
decreased, there was an opposite trend in that of city C.

Turning into detail, 35 foreign
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meetings
were organized
in city A in 1965, which was a bit higher than a more-than-30-conference number of city B. In the
next
20 years, while the figure for city B declined
gradually
to exactly 25
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conferences
, that of city A fell
sharply
to 20
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meetings
in 1975
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before
growing
substantially
by 10
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conferences
in 1985. Throughout the remainders of the period, oscillation
were witnessed
in both the number for city A and city B, remaining at over 20 and 25
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conferences
,
respectively
.

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Regarding to
city C, starting at
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only
5, its number of international
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meetings
doubled in 1975. The figure grew
considerably
to more than 25
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conferences
in the
next
20 years. It declined
slightly
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before
reaching the peak of 30
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meetings
in 2010, surpassing two remaining
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cities
as the most popular venue for global
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conferences
among three surveyed hosts.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The line graph below provides the number of international conferences in three cities from 1965 to 2010.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
197 words
6.5
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