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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v.7

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 7
The Bar graph illustrates the change of transport modes over three different time period for a European city. Overall, used of car was chronologically increased over that period, but used of bus was decline over that same time frame. In the case of transportation mode train and tube are fluctuated over the time but over that period used of train increased form the starting year and used of tube fall slide form the base starting year. In the year 1960, bus was the most suitable mode of transport it almost 38% and it was the height at that time, however over the time priority uses of bus was declined 24% and at 2000 level it was 15%. In 1960, trains and tubs also popular approximately train 19% and tubs roughly 28%. Uses of tube was decreased only 3% in 1960 to 2000(28% to 25%). In the case of trains percentage of commuter was increased almost 3% from the base year. Between 1960 and 2000, the user of cars was increased high almost 31% over that time frame. In 1960 it was 7 % only after 20 years it increased to 23% and in 2000 it raised at 38% level. So, over that 40 year time popularity of cars was increased the most.
The Bar graph illustrates the
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 7

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