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The line charts compare the number of people who emigrate and immigrate in the UK while the bar graph shows the net of migration between 1999 and 2008. v.2

The line charts compare the number of people who emigrate and immigrate in the UK while the bar graph shows the net of migration between 1999 and 2008. v. 2
The line charts compare the number of people who emigrate and immigrate in the UK while the bar graph shows the net of migration between 1999 and 2008. Overall, the figures for immigration were always higher than emigration, but both rates rose over 10 years. Besides, the net of migration fluctuated throughout the period. The numbers of immigration and emigration increased steadily from 450, 000 and 300, 000 people in 1999 to reach a peak of 600, 000 and around 400, 000 people in 2006, respectively. While the figure for immigration decreased slightly to just below 600, 000 people in 2008, the number of emigration dropped suddenly to around 350, 000 people in 2007 before grew again to the highest point of nearly 420, 000 people in 2008. From 1999 to 2003, the net migration slightly varied between 150, 000 and 180, 000 people. In the last 5 years, except the figure was around 180, 000 people in 2008, the other number always was higher than 200, 000 and reached a peak of 250, 000 people in 2004.
The line charts compare the
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number
of
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people
who emigrate and immigrate in the UK while the bar graph
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shows
the net of migration between 1999 and 2008.

Overall
, the figures for immigration were always higher than emigration,
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but
both rates rose over 10 years.
Besides
, the net of migration fluctuated throughout the period.

The
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numbers
of immigration and emigration increased
steadily
from 450, 000 and 300, 000
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people
in 1999 to reach a peak of 600, 000 and around 400, 000
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people
in 2006,
respectively
. While the figure for immigration decreased
slightly
to
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just
below 600, 000
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people
in 2008, the
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number
of emigration dropped
suddenly
to around 350, 000
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people
in 2007
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before
grew again to the highest point of
nearly
420, 000
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people
in 2008.

From 1999 to 2003, the net migration
slightly
varied between 150, 000 and 180, 000
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people
. In the last 5 years, except the figure was around 180, 000
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people
in 2008, the other
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number
always was higher than 200, 000 and reached a peak of 250, 000
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people
in 2004.
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IELTS academic The line charts compare the number of people who emigrate and immigrate in the UK while the bar graph shows the net of migration between 1999 and 2008. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
178 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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