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The line graph shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v.2

The line graph shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 2
The plotted line graph illustrates that the number of foreigners travelled to Australia in the given period while the table describes that the number of persons from six countries ( South Korea, Japan, China, USA, Britain and Europe) explored Australia in 1975 and 2005. Overall, there had been a significant surge in the strength of people who had been to Australia over the period. The line graph entitles that 10 million people drew to Australia in 1975. Then, the figure sharply increased by 5 million in 1985, which further dramatically rose to almost 25 million in 1995. In 2005, a similar trend was observed with an enhancement of 6 million in the figure. While regarding the table, the highest escalation in the figure of Japanese fir their visit to Australia was almost four times in 2005 as compared to 3. 2 million in 1975. Similarly, the strength of tourists from the other five countries was remarkably soared by three times in the 30 years.
The plotted line graph illustrates that the number of foreigners travelled to Australia in the
given
period while the table
describes
that the number of persons from six countries
(
South Korea, Japan, China, USA, Britain and Europe) explored Australia in 1975 and 2005.

Overall
, there had been a significant surge in the strength of
people
who had been to Australia over the period.

The line graph entitles that 10
million
people
drew to Australia in 1975. Then, the figure
sharply
increased by 5
million
in 1985, which
further
dramatically
rose to almost 25
million
in 1995. In 2005, a similar trend
was observed
with an enhancement of 6
million
in the figure.

While regarding the table, the highest escalation in the figure of Japanese fir their visit to Australia was almost four times in 2005 as compared to 3. 2
million
in 1975.
Similarly
, the strength of tourists from the other five countries was
remarkably
soared by three times in the 30 years.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
164 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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