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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v.2

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 2
This line graph presents the number of visits to Australia by foreign citizens per year while the table specifies the visits per country that took place in the year 1975 and 2005. There has been a gradual increase from 1975 to 1985 while the number doubled from 1984 to 1995 as seen on the chart. However, compared to 1975, in 2005 the number of foreign visitors has increased drastically (Total 8. 8 in 1975; 30. 4 in 2005). Furthermore, an interesting fact is that among the six countries given, South Korea and Japan had the most number of foreign visitors to Australia in 2005 compared to 1975 (South Korea: 2. 9 in 1975 and 9. 1 in 2005; Japan: 3. 2 in 1975 and 12. 0 in 2005). Meanwhile, China having had 0. 3 million people visiting Australia in 1975 but 0. 8 million in 2005 which is quite less in terms of changes that took place over the years compared to other countries over the past years. Overall, compared to 1975 the number of foreign visitors has been increasing, reaching quite a high number of visitors of 32 million to Australia while having a majority of visitors from South Korea and Japan. On the other hand, the least number of travels was from China but it is safe to say that the majority of the visits to Australia were from Asian countries than Western countries.
This line graph presents the
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number
of visits to Australia by
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foreign
citizens per year while the table specifies the visits per
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country
that took place in the year 1975 and 2005. There has been a gradual increase from 1975 to 1985 while the
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number
doubled from 1984 to 1995 as
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seen
on the chart.
However
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number
of
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foreign
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visitors
has increased
drastically
(Total 8. 8 in 1975; 30. 4 in 2005).

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, an interesting fact is that among the six
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countries
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given
, South Korea and Japan had the most
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number
of
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foreign
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visitors
to Australia in 2005 compared to 1975 (South Korea: 2. 9 in 1975 and 9. 1 in 2005; Japan: 3. 2 in 1975 and 12. 0 in 2005). Meanwhile, China having had 0. 3 million
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people
visiting Australia in 1975
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but
0. 8 million in 2005 which is quite less in terms of
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changes
that took place over the years compared to other
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countries
over the past years.

Overall
, compared to 1975 the
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number
of
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foreign
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visitors
has been increasing, reaching quite a high
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number
of
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visitors
of 32 million to Australia while having a majority of
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visitors
from South Korea and Japan.
On the other hand
, the least
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number
of travels was from China
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but
it is safe to say that the majority of the visits to Australia were from Asian
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countries
than Western
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countries
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 2

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6.5
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