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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v.3

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 3
The given line graph and table give data on the number of overseas visitors travelling to Australia in millions of people from the year 1975 to 2005 and shows the number of travellers from 6 different parts of the world. As is presented in the illustration, the number of visitors travelling to Australia raised steadily and the majority of these visitors came from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Almost 10 million people visited Australia in the year 1975 and this amount increased to over 15 million after 10 years. In the year 1995, total visitor travelled Australia was approximately 24 million and finally in 2005 well over 30 million. The second table gives data on the number of visitors from 6 different regions who came to visit Australia in 2 different years with a 30 years interval. Both in 1975 and in 2005, Australia had the largest number of Japanese tourists followed by South Korea. In 2005, tourists from these 2 countries who came to visit Australia were about 20 million while 4. 5 million tourists came from Europe and only 1. 1 million from the USA. The least number of tourists came to Australia during this period are from China which was only 0. 3 million in 1975 and 0. 8 million in 2005. The statistics of the table shows that total tourist visited Australia from 6 different parts of the world increased significantly in 300 years amounting well over 30 million in 12005 compared to the total number of 8. 8 million 30 years earlier.
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visitors
travelling to Australia in
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millions
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people
from the
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year
1975 to 2005 and
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travellers
from 6
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different
parts of the world.

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is presented
in the illustration, the
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number
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visitors
travelling to Australia raised
steadily
and the majority of these
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visitors
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came
from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Almost 10
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million
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people
visited Australia in the
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year
1975 and this amount increased to over 15
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million
after 10 years. In the
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1995, total
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visitor
travelled Australia was approximately 24
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million
and
finally
in 2005 well over 30 million.

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visitors
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regions who
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came
to visit Australia in 2
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different
years with a 30 years interval. Both in 1975 and in 2005, Australia had the largest
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number
of Japanese
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tourists
followed by South Korea. In 2005,
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tourists
from these 2 countries who
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came
to visit Australia were about 20
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million
while 4. 5
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tourists
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came
from Europe and
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1. 1
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million
from the USA. The least
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of
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tourists
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came
to Australia during this period are from China which was
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0. 3
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in 1975 and 0. 8
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million
in 2005. The statistics of the table
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shows
that total
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tourist
visited Australia from 6
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different
parts of the world increased
significantly
in 300 years amounting well over 30
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million
in 12005 compared to the total
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number
of 8. 8
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million
30 years earlier.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 3

Academic
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3 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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