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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v.1

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 1
The provided line graph delineates data on the changes of visitors' number to Australia from 1975 until 2005 while the table elaborates the percentage of tourists from various countries. At the onset, the number of foreign travellers to Australia had surged ceaselessly during the whole period and tripled by 2005. Moreover, the most substantial growth in the number of foreigners attended Australia had shown by Japan, South Korea and Europe. The line graph shows that visit to Australia by non-residents had overwhelmingly moved upward over the period of 2 decades: it was nearly 10 million in 1975 and slightly more than 30 million in 2005. Throughout the period, the number of tourists went up as high as 5 million each decade; however, between 1985 and 1995 it boomed to almost 10 million. While taking into consideration the table data we can easily infer that South Korea, Japan and Europe were leading sources of tourists (2. 9, 3. 2 and 1. 1 million respectively) to Australia. In the wake of 3 decades, those figures almost quadrupled to 9. 1, 12. and 4. 5 million consecutively. Other countries represented less dramatic increase: China - from 0. 3 to 0. 8 million, the USA - from 0. 4 to 1. 1 million and the UK - from 0. 9 to 2. 9 million. It is worth noticing that the most significant growth in the number of travellers to Australia was from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Australia received the highest number of tourists from these countries during the period.
The provided line graph delineates data on the
changes
of visitors'
number
to Australia from 1975 until 2005 while the table elaborates the percentage of
tourists
from various countries. At the onset, the
number
of foreign
travellers
to Australia had surged
ceaselessly
during the whole
period
and tripled by 2005.
Moreover
, the most substantial growth in the
number
of foreigners attended Australia had shown by Japan, South Korea and Europe.

The line graph
shows
that visit to Australia by non-residents had
overwhelmingly
moved
upward over the
period
of 2 decades: it was
nearly
10
million
in 1975 and
slightly
more than 30
million
in 2005. Throughout the
period
, the
number
of
tourists
went up as high as 5
million
each decade;
however
, between 1985 and 1995 it boomed to almost 10 million.

While taking into consideration the table data we can
easily
infer that South Korea, Japan and Europe were leading sources of
tourists
(2. 9, 3. 2 and 1. 1
million
respectively
) to Australia. In the wake of 3 decades, those figures almost quadrupled to 9. 1, 12.
and
4. 5
million
consecutively
. Other countries represented less dramatic increase: China
-
from 0. 3 to 0. 8
million
, the USA
-
from 0. 4 to 1. 1
million
and the UK
-
from 0. 9 to 2. 9
million
. It is worth noticing that the most significant growth in the
number
of
travellers
to Australia was from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Australia received the highest
number
of
tourists
from these countries during the
period
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 1

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3 paragraphs
256 words
5.5
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