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The line graph shows the cost for watching films The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms v.2

The line graph shows the cost for watching films The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms v. 2
The line graph illustrates how much money was spent on watching films in 3 primary forms namely cinemas, DVDs and legal download as well as the percentage split among the three forms given in the pie charts. Overall, cinema tickets were notably the most expensive type of watching movies. Particularly, more people chose to rent a DVD rather than watching online or going to the movie theatres. In 2005, cinema ticket cost stood at around £9, £3 higher than DVD renting price, then the figure increased gradually to about £11. 5 in 2009 before surging to £14 in the end. Over the same period, the amount of money spent on renting DVDs saw a gradual rise of just £2 over the time shown. Finally, users had to pay more to download movies online in 2005, at £8; however, the cost declined sharply to £6 in 2006, then it saw a significant rise of £3 to stand at £9 in 2011. The number of people rented a DVD contributed of nearly three fourth of the total in 2005, then the figure dropped to just over one second of the total 6 years later. Only 30% of citizens went to the cinema, compared to just 6% of those watching online in 2005, then the former saw a decrease of 12% while the latter experienced a dramatic increase of 20% in 2011.
The line graph illustrates how much money
was spent
on watching films in 3 primary forms
namely
cinemas
, DVDs and legal download
as well
as the percentage split among the three forms
given
in the pie charts.

Overall
,
cinema
tickets were
notably
the most expensive type of watching movies.
Particularly
, more
people
chose to rent a DVD
rather
than watching online or going to the movie
theatres
.

In 2005,
cinema
ticket cost stood at around £9, £3 higher than DVD renting price, then the figure increased
gradually
to about £11. 5 in 2009
before
surging to £14 in the
end
. Over the same period, the amount of money spent on renting DVDs
saw
a gradual rise of
just
£2 over the time shown.
Finally
, users had to pay more to download movies online in 2005, at £8;
however
, the cost declined
sharply
to £6 in 2006, then it
saw
a significant rise of £3 to stand at £9 in 2011.

The number of
people
rented a DVD contributed of
nearly
three fourth of the total in 2005, then the figure dropped to
just
over one second of the total 6 years later.
Only
30% of citizens went to the
cinema
, compared to
just
6% of those watching online in 2005, then the former
saw
a decrease of 12% while the latter experienced a dramatic increase of 20% in 2011.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the cost for watching films The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
6.5
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