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The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v.3

The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 3
The bar graph presents comparative data on the amount of CO2 eruption per passenger kilometre travel in different modes of vehicles while the pie chart shows the ratio of the European Union’s spending on these forms of transportation. As is clear from the given illustration, Carbon dioxide discharge per passenger in the air travel is significantly higher than any other mode of transportation and more than half of the European Union’s spending goes on the road transport system. According to the given bar graph, more than 350 grams of CO2 ejection happens when a passenger travels one km in an aeroplane. This Carbon dioxide emission is quite higher than any other form of transportation. The second highest CO2 release is caused by private cars which are responsible for discharging about 130 gm of CO2 per passenger km. Buses, maritime and rails are responsible for the release of around 50 grams of CO2 per passenger. Finally, coaches are the most eco-friendly transportations as they emit less than 50 grams of Carbon dioxide per passenger kilometre. On the other hand, the pie chart depicts the fund being spent on different modes of transportation types and it is obvious that more than half of their spending goes on roads. Railways get the second highest funding which is 31%. Public transportation funding amounts 10% while all other transportations’ EU budget amounts less than 10% costs.
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passenger
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travel in
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different
modes of vehicles while the pie chart
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shows
the ratio of the European Union’s spending on these forms of
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transportation
. As is
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clear
from the
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given
illustration, Carbon dioxide discharge per
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passenger
in the air travel is
significantly
higher than any
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other
mode of
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transportation
and more than half of the European Union’s spending goes on the road transport system.

According to the
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given
bar graph, more than 350 grams of CO2 ejection happens when a
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passenger
travels one km in an
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aeroplane
. This Carbon dioxide emission is quite higher than any
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other
form of
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transportation
. The second highest CO2 release
is caused
by private cars which are responsible for discharging about 130 gm of CO2 per
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passenger
km. Buses, maritime and rails are responsible for the release of around 50 grams of CO2 per
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passenger
.
Finally
, coaches are the most eco-friendly
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transportations
as they emit less than 50 grams of Carbon dioxide per
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passenger
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kilometre
.

On the
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other
hand, the pie chart depicts the fund
being spent
on
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different
modes of
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transportation
types and it is obvious that more than half of their spending goes on roads. Railways
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get
the second highest funding which is 31%. Public
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transportation
funding amounts 10% while all
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other
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transportations’
EU budget amounts less than 10% costs.
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17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 3

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3 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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