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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station
The diagram illustrates the production of electricity in a hydroelectric power station. Overall, the process begins with the water flows from river into a high-level reservoir and ends with the transmission of power lines to national generator. If can be clearly seen that the first step is collect water in a high-level reservoir. When the generation begins, the water passes through an intake which is in the bottom of dam. The intake opens in day allows the flow of water to generate electricity and is closed at night to the water flows out into the river below the dam during pumping. The next step is the transportation of water into a reversible turbines, which is connected with a generator in power station. In day, the generator is operated that permits water to flow down into low-level reservoir, while at night, the reversible turbines pump water into high-level reservoir. Finally, the generator in the power station is linked with power lines which are used to transport electricity to national generator.
The diagram illustrates the production of electricity in a hydroelectric
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power
station.

Overall
, the process
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begins
with the
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water
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flows
from river into a high-level
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reservoir
and ends with the transmission of
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power
lines to national generator.

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If
can be
clearly
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seen
that the
first
step is collect
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water
in a high-level
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reservoir
. When the generation
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begins
, the
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water
passes through an intake which is in the bottom of dam. The intake opens in day
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allows
the
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flow
of
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water
to generate electricity and
is closed
at night to the
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water
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flows
out into the river below the dam during pumping. The
next
step is the transportation of
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water
into a reversible
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turbines
, which
is connected
with a generator in
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power
station. In day, the generator
is operated
that permits
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water
to
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flow
down into low-level
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reservoir
, while at night, the reversible turbines pump
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water
into high-level
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reservoir
.
Finally
, the generator in the
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power
station
is linked
with
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power
lines which are
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used
to transport electricity to national generator.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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