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The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v.2

The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 2
The graphs outline the amount of Carbon dioxide emission per passenger from different vehicles in the European Union and the EU expenditures on different modes of transportation. Overall, the highest amount of CO2 per person is emitted by the Air transports and the European Union spends the highest percentage of funds for the road transportation system. According to the bar graph, a single passenger of a personal car is responsible for around 130 gm of CO2 per kilometre while a passenger in a bus contributes to 65 gm CO2 eruption per kilometre. Coaches, maritime and rail passengers emit the lowest amount of CO2 which is about 50 grams per passenger. Finally, an aeroplane traveller contributes to 370 km of CO2 per kilometre which is the highest. Based on the pie chart, the European Union spent the highest amount (52%) on the road transportation system while spent only 1% to 2% on ports, waterway airport intermodal and other transport systems. They spent 31% on the rail system and 10% on the public transportation system. This indicates the European Union spent the majority of the budget on public transportations.
The graphs outline the
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of Carbon dioxide emission per
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passenger
from
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different
vehicles in the European Union and the EU expenditures on
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different
modes of
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transportation
.
Overall
, the highest
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amount
of CO2 per person
is emitted
by the Air transports and the European Union spends the highest percentage of funds for the road
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transportation
system.

According to the bar graph, a single
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passenger
of a personal car is responsible for around 130 gm of CO2 per
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kilometre
while a
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passenger
in a bus contributes to 65 gm CO2 eruption per
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kilometre
. Coaches, maritime and rail
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passengers
emit the lowest
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amount
of CO2 which is about 50 grams per
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passenger
.
Finally
, an
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aeroplane
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traveller
contributes to 370 km of CO2 per
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kilometre
which is the highest.

Based on the pie chart, the European Union
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spent
the highest
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amount
(52%) on the road
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transportation
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system
while
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spent
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. They
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spent
31% on the rail
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system
and 10% on the public
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transportation
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system
. This indicates the European Union
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spent
the majority of the budget on public
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transportations
.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows CO<sub>2</sub> emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
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6.0
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