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The bar chart below shows the distribution of different income groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney according to whether they were born in Australia or overseas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whe v.2

The bar chart below shows the distribution of different income groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney according to whether they were born in Australia or overseas.
The bar chart compares the percentage of men who are native to Australia and from abroad, both the groups are youths and based on four different income categories in Sydney. Overall, The population who are borned in Australia have maximum ratio of middle level income but the least population has low income. Whereas, the people from other nations have minimum level for high income also most significant proportion of people are in lower middle income range. According to the chart, firstly, the minority of people who are originated in Australia have low income level, it is just under 15%. About 5% more people have high income, where more than half population are in the order of lower middle and mid range of income. People withstanding lower income group has 30% but the income group of $600 to $1000 has a majority with a ratio of a third. Secondly, Those who are non-native to Australia has a small ratio of people earning more than $1000, which was 5% less than Australian born. The middle income ranges population is just above a fifth. In addition, people earning less than $300 and between $300 and $600 are more than other group, lower middle group have approximately a third ratio, and it is highest among all.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the distribution of different income groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney according to whether they were born in Australia or overseas.

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