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The chart shows the central heating system at a house works. write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features. v.2

The chart shows the central heating system at a house works. write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features. v. 2
The pictorial graph illustrates an overview of a domestic central heating system. It shows how the tank, boiler and pipes ensure a constant flow of hot water to both the radiators and the taps. The cold water enters the house and is stored in a water storage tank in the roof. From there it flows down to the boiler, located on the ground floor of the house. The boiler, which is fuelled by gas or oil, heats up the water as it passes through it. The hot water is then pumped round the house through a system of pipes and flows into the radiators, located in different rooms. The water circulates through the radiators, which have small tubes inside them to help distribute the heat, and this warms each of the rooms. Some of the water is directed to the taps to provide hot water for the house. Once the water has been through the pipes and radiators, it is returned to the boiler to be re-heated and circulated round the house again.
The pictorial graph illustrates an overview of a domestic central heating system. It
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shows
how the tank,
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boiler
and pipes ensure a constant flow of hot
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water
to both the
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radiators
and the taps.

The
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cold
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water
enters the
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house
and
is stored
in a
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water
storage tank in the roof. From there it flows down to the
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boiler
, located on the
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ground floor
of the
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house
.

The
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boiler
, which
is fuelled
by gas or oil, heats up the
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water
as it passes
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through
it. The hot
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water
is then pumped round the
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house
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through
a system of pipes and flows into the
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radiators
, located in
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different
rooms.
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The
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water
circulates
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through
the
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radiators
, which have
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small
tubes inside them to
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help
distribute the heat, and this warms each of the rooms.
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Some of the
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water
is directed
to the taps to provide hot
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water
for the
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house
.

Once the
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water
has been
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through
the pipes and
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radiators
, it
is returned
to the
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boiler
to be re-heated and circulated round the
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house
again.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart shows the central heating system at a house works. write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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