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The flow chart illustrates the various steps that high school students must follow to enter university. ‬ v.2

The flow chart illustrates the various steps that high school students must follow to enter university. ‬ v. 2
The diagram delineates the process for high school students to access tertiary institution. It is clear that there are several steps, beginning with the finish of high school and end with two results, keep being a student at university or canceling the application. After graduating the high school, student first must complete the application form which could be downloaded from website prior to sending to the administration. If students are given to the temporary acceptance list, they must complete the document again but with more information and send back to the administration. After that, they would get the rejection and then cancel the application. However, some people having a great ambition will strive with another course and repeat the following steps. Regard people with the acceptance from university, they must fill another form correctly before the enrolment. Student, accurately with the previous form, could opt for subjects they want to take in the first year. Additionally, registering with Dean is the final step of the entrance procedure.
The diagram delineates the process for high school
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students
to access tertiary institution. It is
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clear
that there are several steps, beginning with the finish of high school and
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end
with two results,
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keep
being a
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student
at university or canceling the application.

After
The verb 'to graduate' requires the preposition 'from': "graduating from".
graduating
the high school,
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student
first
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must
complete the application form which could
be downloaded
from website prior to sending to the administration. If
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students
are
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given
to the temporary acceptance list, they
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must
complete the document again
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but
with more information and
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send
back to the administration. After that, they would
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get
the rejection and then cancel the application.
However
,
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some
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people
having a great ambition will strive with another course and repeat the following steps.

Regard
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people
with the acceptance from university, they
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must
fill another form
correctly
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before
the
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enrolment
.
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Student
,
accurately
with the previous form, could opt for subjects they want to take in the
first
year.
Additionally
, registering with Dean is the final step of the entrance procedure.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The flow chart illustrates the various steps that high school students must follow to enter university. ‬ v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
167 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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