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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v.6

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 6
The given line graph illustrates the annual visits to Australia by foreigners in million from the year 1975 to 2005 while the table represents these visits from six different countries in both 1975 and 2005. A staggering increase in the number of visits to Australia is noticeable. A large portion of this increase can be attributed to South Koreans and Japanese tourists as is evident in the table data. An upward moving trend is clearly visible in the line graph that shows an increase in visits to Australia by foreigners as the number rose from 8. 8 million in 1975 to 30. 2 million in 2005, almost trebling in value in the period spanning from 1975 to 2000. This spike in numbers can be largely attributed to South Koreans and Japanese tourists as their tourism rose a whopping 15 million collectively. This trend was not seen in the United States, China, or Britain as their tourists' numbers who visited Australia did not increase significantly (1. 1, 0. 8 and 2. 9 respectively in 2005). European tourism, however, also saw a rise in appetite towards Australia their tourism almost quadrupled from 1975 to 2005.
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visits
to Australia by foreigners in
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million
from the year 1975 to 2005 while the table represents these
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visits
from six
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different
countries in both 1975 and 2005. A staggering
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increase
in the
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number
of
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visits
to Australia is noticeable. A large portion of this
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increase
can
be attributed
to South Koreans and Japanese tourists as is evident in the table data.

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clearly
visible in the line graph that
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shows
an
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increase
in
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visits
to Australia by foreigners as the
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number
rose from 8. 8
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million
in 1975 to 30. 2
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million
in 2005, almost trebling in value in the period spanning from 1975 to 2000.

This spike in
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numbers
can be
largely
attributed to South Koreans and Japanese tourists as their tourism rose a whopping 15
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million
collectively
. This trend was not
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seen
in the United States, China, or Britain as their tourists'
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numbers
who visited Australia did not
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increase
significantly
(1. 1, 0. 8 and 2. 9
respectively
in 2005). European tourism,
however
,
also
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saw
a rise in appetite towards Australia their tourism almost quadrupled from 1975 to 2005.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. v. 6

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3 paragraphs
193 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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