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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v.2

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 2
The given illustration gives data on the number of mobiles and land phone users in six different countries namely: Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy. As is presented in the chart Canada, US and Denmark have more landline users than the cell phone users while the opposite is true for Germany, UK, Sweden and Italy where the cell phone users exceed the number of land phone users. In Canada, the US and Denmark the numbers of cell phone users per 100 are consecutively 38, 48 and 71 while the landline users are 61, 38 and 87. On the other hand, the remaining 4 countries have much more mobile phone users than the landline users. The Italian people use the highest percentage of land phones and lowest percentage of cell phones on an average. On the contrary, Canadians use the lowest number of cell phones per 100 people while the mobiles phone users are almost half of the total land phone users. In summary, US and Canada have higher land phone users than the cell phone users while the European prefers to use cell phones than the land phones.
The
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given
illustration gives data on the
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number
of mobiles and
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land
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phone
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users
in six
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different
countries
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: Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy.

As
is presented
in the chart Canada, US and Denmark have more landline
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users
than the
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cell
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phone
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users
while the opposite is true for Germany, UK, Sweden and Italy where the
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cell
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phone
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users
exceed the
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number
of
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land
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phone
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users
. In Canada, the US and Denmark the
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numbers
of
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cell
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phone
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users
per 100 are
consecutively
38, 48 and 71 while the landline
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users
are 61, 38 and 87.
On the other hand
, the remaining 4 countries have much more mobile
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phone
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users
than the landline
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users
. The Italian
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people
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use
the highest percentage of
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land
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phones
and lowest percentage of
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cell
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phones
on an average.
On the contrary
, Canadians
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use
the lowest
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number
of
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cell
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phones
per 100
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people
while the mobiles
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users
are almost half of the total
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land
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users.

In summary, US and Canada have higher
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land
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phone
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users
than the
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cell
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phone
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users
while the European prefers to
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use
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cell
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phones
than the
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land
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phones
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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