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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v.3

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 3
The bar graph shows the ratio of cell phone and landline users in 7 countries, namely - Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy. It is apparently seen that mobile phones are more widely used in the UK, Germany, Sweden and Italy while more percentages of Canadians, Americans and Danes use the fixed phone lines. As the diagram suggests, six out of ten Canadians use landlines while almost 70% Americans had land phones. On contrary to that, almost 40% Canadians prefer mobile phones while almost half of the Americans use cell phones. Mobile phone ownership in Germany and Denmark was 70% and 80% respectively and Danes use more mobile and landlines in average than citizens in other countries. Mobile phones were more popular among British, Swedish and Italian citizens as their ownership ratio falls between 80 to 90 percent, significantly higher than that of Canada, and the US. In summary, Danes use the highest proportion of phones (both landlines and cell phones). Mobile phones are prefered by British, Swedish, German and Italian while a dominance of landlines is obvious in the rest of the countries.
The bar graph
shows
the ratio of cell
phone
and landline users in 7 countries,
namely
-
Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy. It is
apparently
seen
that mobile
phones
are more
widely
used
in the UK, Germany, Sweden and Italy while more percentages of Canadians, Americans and Danes
use
the
fixed
phone
lines.

As the diagram suggests, six out of ten Canadians
use
landlines while almost 70% Americans had land
phones
. On contrary to that, almost 40% Canadians prefer mobile
phones
while almost half of the Americans
use
cell
phones
. Mobile
phone
ownership in Germany and Denmark was 70% and 80%
respectively
and Danes
use
more mobile and landlines in average than citizens in other countries. Mobile
phones
were more popular among British, Swedish and Italian citizens as their ownership ratio falls
between 80 to 90
percent,
significantly
higher than that of Canada, and the US.

In summary, Danes
use
the highest proportion of
phones
(both landlines and cell
phones)
. Mobile
phones
are
prefered
by British, Swedish, German and Italian while a dominance of landlines is obvious in the rest of the countries.
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 3

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3 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
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