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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v.1

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 1
The supplied bar graph shows data on the number of cell phone and land phone users in seven countries in the Europe and the American regions. As is observed from the presentation,   the number of landline users in Denmark, US and Canada are higher than the number of cell phone users in these countries. On the contrary, in Italy, Sweden, Denmark and Germany the cell phone users are higher in number than that of land phone users. In Italy, Sweden, UK and Denmark almost 80-90 percent people use the cell phone. Among these six countries, Italian people are highest in percent in terms of cell phone usages whereas the highest percentages of land phone users are found in Denmark which is almost 90%. The difference between cell phone and land phone users is highest in Italy and in Denmark. The lowest number of land phone users can be found in Canada. In summary, North America has more land phone users than their cell phone users and most of the European people prefer to use mobile phones over land phones.
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is highest in Italy and in Denmark. The lowest
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IELTS academic The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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