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The line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005. v.1

The line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005. v. 1
The illustration compares the amount spent on purchasing books between 1995 and 2005 by the citizens of four countries. Generally speaking, Germans spent the highest amount on books during this period and Austrian citizens’ spending went higher than Italians after 2002. According to the line graph, Germans spent 80 million US dollar for buying books in 1995 which was significantly higher than the amount spent by other nationalities. In this year Italians and French people disbursed 50 and 55 million respectively for the same purpose. Austrian people spent less than 30 million which was lower than half of the Germans spending for books. After 2 years, spending by those nationalities for purchasing books increased. In 1999, the expenditure by Germans for books reached to 90 million while it was 60 and 50 million for French and Italian. Expenses on books for Austrian remained the same as it was in 1995. However, after 2001, Austrian people started spending more on books and this amount exceeded the money spent by Italians in 2003, finally reaching to over 60 million in 2005. A similar amount was spent by French people in this year while Italians cost for books stood at 50 million. The highest payer on books in 2005 was Germany, accounting 95 million, which was considerably higher than other nations’ spending on books.
The illustration compares the
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on purchasing
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between 1995 and 2005 by the citizens of four countries.
Generally
speaking, Germans
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the highest
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amount
on
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books
during this period and Austrian citizens’
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went higher than Italians after 2002.

According to the line graph, Germans
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80
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US dollar for buying
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books
in 1995 which was
significantly
higher than the
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amount
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spent
by other nationalities. In this year Italians and French
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people
disbursed 50 and 55
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million
respectively
for the same purpose. Austrian
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people
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spent
less than 30
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million
which was lower than half of the Germans
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spending
for
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books
. After 2 years,
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spending
by those nationalities for purchasing
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books
increased. In 1999, the expenditure by Germans for
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books
reached to 90
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million
while it was 60 and 50
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for French and Italian. Expenses on
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books
for Austrian remained the same as it was in 1995.
However
, after 2001, Austrian
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more on
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and this
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exceeded the money
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spent
by Italians in 2003,
finally
reaching to over 60
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million
in 2005. A similar
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was
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by French
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in this year while Italians cost for
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stood at 50
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. The highest payer on
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in 2005 was Germany, accounting 95
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, which was
considerably
higher than other nations’
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spending
on
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.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005. v. 1

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2 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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