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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and v.2

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom.
The graph shows the annual heat in Auckland and Christchurch, New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, United Kingdom on a monthly basis. Overall, four countries remained practically unchanged at the end of the year, as at the beginning. At the beginning of the year New Zealand' s both countries temperature level out about 25°C warm. Meanwhile, London' s two countries temperature remain above 5°C cold. During a half part of year the weather condition starts noticeably change, which presents a dramatically increase at about 20°C in London' s and decrease at less than 15 °C in New Zealand' s counties between mid-July and mid-August. However, due to Autumn and Winter seasons the climate become climbing in Auckland and Christchurch at 20°C, meanwhile, it plummets in London and Edinburgh at 5°C. To sum up, the weather temperature become colder in the summer season in New Zealand' s two countries and it show completely the opposite pattern to the two British cities. However London and Edinburgh have lower temperature than Auckland and Christchurch.
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the annual heat in Auckland and Christchurch,
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Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, United Kingdom on a monthly basis.

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, four
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remained
practically
unchanged at the
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of the year, as at the beginning. At the beginning of the year
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countries
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level out about
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25°C
warm. Meanwhile,
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#039; s two
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countries
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temperature
remain above
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5°C
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cold
. During a half part of year the weather condition
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starts
noticeably
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, which presents a
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dramatically increase
at about
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20°C
in
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#039; s and decrease at less than 15 °C in
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Zealand&
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However
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20°C
, meanwhile, it plummets in London and Edinburgh at
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5°C
.

To sum up, the weather
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temperature
become colder in
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the summer season
in
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#039; s two
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and it
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completely the opposite pattern to the two British cities.
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However
London and Edinburgh have lower
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temperature
than Auckland and Christchurch.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperature for Auckland and Christchurch, two sites in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two sites in the United Kingdom.

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3 paragraphs
171 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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