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The graph shows the amount spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. v.2

The graph shows the amount spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. v. 2
the line graph illustrates how much money spent on book in four countries, namely Germany, France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005. It is clear that the propotion of Germany was by far highest during the research period. At the same time, there was a significant increase in the amount of money in four coutries from 1995 to 2005. In 1995, eighty millions of dollar was spent on book in Germany. At the same time, this figures in France, Italy, Austria was 55 millions of dollar, 50 millions of dollar, 30 millions of dollar relatively. Germany and Italy rose in the period time before they slightly went down in 2003, 1999 relatively. In 2005, Germay still had a highest figure, at just under 100 millions of dollar. France stably went up to over 70 millions of dollar. Austria dramatically jumped to 70 millios of dollar, more than Italy which spent 60 millions of dollar in book in 2005.
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the
line graph illustrates how much money spent on book in four countries,
namely
Germany, France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.

It is
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clear
that the
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propotion
of Germany was by far highest during the research period. At the same time, there was a significant increase in the amount of money in four
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coutries
from 1995 to 2005.

In 1995, eighty
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millions
of
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dollar
was spent
on book in Germany. At the same time, this figures in France, Italy, Austria was 55
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millions
of
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dollar
, 50
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millions
of
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dollar
, 30
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millions
of
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dollar
relatively
. Germany and Italy rose in the period time
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before
they
slightly
went down in 2003, 1999
relatively
.

In 2005,
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Germay
still
had
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a
highest figure, at
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just
under 100
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millions
of
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dollar
. France
stably
went up to over 70
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of
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. Austria
dramatically
jumped to 70
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millios
of
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, more than Italy which spent 60
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millions
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dollar
in book in 2005.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the amount spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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