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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v.2

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 2
The line graph compares how much money was spend on books in four countries (Germany, France, Italy and Austria) in ten-year period between 1995 and 2005 Overall, the amount of money on buying books increased in all four nations and Germany was the biggest spender on books despite of the slightly decrease between 1999 and 2003. Initially, Italy and France spent about as much as each other. However, since 1999, France began to spend more money and the gap had widened. In 2005, money spent on books in France reached just below 70 million while Italy only spent slightly above 60 million. As can be seen from the graph, in 1995, Austria spent the least amount on books, only 30 million. The spending on books of Austria climbed steadily to 40 million in 1999 and the remained stable before it dramatically increase in 2001. Austria had surpass Italy and become the third the third largest spender in 2005.
The line graph compares how much
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spend
on
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books
in four countries (Germany, France, Italy and Austria) in ten-year period between 1995 and 2005

Overall
, the amount of
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money
on buying
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books
increased in all four nations and Germany was the biggest spender on
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despite of
the
slightly
decrease between 1999 and 2003.

Initially
, Italy and France
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about as much as each other.
However
, since 1999, France began to spend more
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money
and the gap had widened. In 2005,
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money
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spent
on
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books
in France reached
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just
below 70 million while Italy
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only
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spent
slightly
above 60 million.

As can be
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seen
from the graph, in 1995, Austria
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spent
the least amount on
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books
,
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only
30 million. The spending on
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books
of Austria climbed
steadily
to 40 million in 1999 and the remained stable
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before
it
dramatically
increase in 2001. Austria had surpass Italy and become
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the third the third
largest spender in 2005.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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