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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U S Adults online purchasing habits in 2015 while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences
The pie chart illustrate the propotion maturity customer’s shopping tendency in the Internet of US in 2015, while the bar chart demonstrates how many online stores and physical stores were enrolled by different types of US buyer. Overall, it is clear to seen that less often of online shopper was represend in the highest percentage. Besides, while the buying in physical store out of numbers buying online in the most often type’s shopper, the opposite was true for monthly online shoppers. In particular, people who spend less time on shopping online registered the highest percentage at 37%. At 28%, the propotion of buying online few time a month ranked second in the pie chart. In 2015, the customers who never purchasing in the website account for 20% while the opposite favour of shopping comprised the smallest propotion at 15%. As for the bar chart, less frequent online shoppers occurred the most popular among buying in physical store at 82%, which over 4 times the figure for online ones at near 20%. The similar pattern could also odserved in all online shoppers, as the propotion of physical store was nearly twice as many as that of online at 65% comparied to 35%. Weeky online is opposite which people chose online at over 62% more than physical store at nearly 40%
The pie
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illustrate the
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propotion
maturity customer’s shopping tendency
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in the Internet
of US in 2015, while the bar
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chart
demonstrates how
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many
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online
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stores
and
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physical
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stores
were enrolled
by
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different
types of US buyer.

Overall
, it is
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clear
to
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seen
that less
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often
of
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online
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shopper
was
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represend
in the highest percentage.
Besides
, while the
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buying
in
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physical
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store
out of numbers
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buying
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online
in the most
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often
type’s
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shopper
, the opposite was true for monthly
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online
shoppers.

In particular
,
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people
who spend less time on shopping
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online
registered the highest percentage at 37%. At 28%, the
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propotion
of
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buying
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online
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few time
a month ranked second in the pie
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chart
. In 2015, the customers who never purchasing in the website account for 20% while the opposite
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favour
of shopping comprised the smallest
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propotion
at 15%.

As for the bar
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, less frequent
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online
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shoppers
occurred the most popular among
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buying
in
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physical
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store
at 82%, which over 4 times the figure for
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online
ones at near 20%. The similar pattern could
also
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odserved
in all
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online
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shoppers
, as the
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propotion
of
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physical
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store
was
nearly
twice as
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many
as that of
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online
at 65%
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comparied
to 35%.
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Weeky
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online
is opposite which
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people
chose
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online
at over 62% more than
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physical
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store
at
nearly
40%
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the frequency of U S Adults online purchasing habits in 2015 while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences

Academic
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218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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