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The line graph below show the population size, birth and death rate of ENgland and Whales from 1700 to 2000. v.2

The line graph below show the population size, birth and death rate of ENgland and Whales from 1700 to 2000. v. 2
The given graph depicts, the three categories ( size, birth and death rate ) were in two countries between 1700-2000. According to the graph, the population size was increased and death rate was dropped. In 1700 year was started population size. Between 1700- 1750 year was sharply increasing and in 1800 year fallen down. In 1950 year was rapidly rised. Birth rate and death rate was started in the same year. In 1700 year birth rate And death rate was similarly climbed. From 1750- 1800 year was shown remained stable. Birth rate in 1800 year was dramatically declined in 1850 year. On the other hand, in 1950 year was gone up. Death rate was step by step fallen down in 2000 year. In conclusion, these types of three categories were stated in 1700 year. The population size was increased and death rate was gone down. England and whales were represented birth rate and death rate was opposed in 1950 year.
The
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given
graph depicts, the three categories
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size
,
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birth
and death
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rate
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)
were in two countries between 1700-2000.

According to the graph, the population
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size
was increased
and death
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rate
was dropped
. In 1700
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year
was
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started
population
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size
. Between
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1700- 1750
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year
was
sharply
increasing and in 1800
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year
fallen down. In 1950
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year
was
rapidly
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.
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Birth
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rate
and death
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rate
was
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started
in the same
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year
. In 1700
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year
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birth
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rate
And death
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rate
was
similarly
climbed.
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From 1750- 1800
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year
was shown
remained stable.
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Birth
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rate
in 1800
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year
was
dramatically
declined in 1850
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year
.
On the other hand
, in 1950
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year
was gone
up. Death
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rate
was step by step fallen down in 2000
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year
.
In conclusion
, these types of three categories
were stated
in 1700
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year
. The population
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size
was increased
and death
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rate
was gone
down. England and whales
were represented
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birth
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rate
and death
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rate
was opposed
in 1950
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year
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph below show the population size, birth and death rate of ENgland and Whales from 1700 to 2000. v. 2

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2 paragraphs
160 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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