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The graph bellow shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in United Kingdom in 1970, 1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The graph bellow shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in United Kingdom in 1970, 1990 and 2000.
The pictorial depicts the different type of transportation facilities used to travel and return from workplace by the UK citizens in 1970, 1990 and 2000. Overall, there was a considerable increased in the usage of cars as a medium of transportation in the given period. By contrast, the preference of biking as well as walking to the office dramatically declined in 1970 and 1990 onward. First and foremost, car usage which stood at 10 percent in the initial period, gradually uplifted to approximately 4 times higher in the end of the given sequence, i. e. just beneath 40 percent of the average. Contrary, traveling by bikes and walking experienced a noticeable decreased over the year with about 33% of bikers and 35% walkers in 1990 onward. Nevertheless, the number of walking-workers somehow increased although slightly in 2000 to exactly 15 percent. Meanwhile, bikers continue to decline to reach just after 5 percent of the average. The other type of transport, bus, showed a fluctuation over the years. It started with 20% in 1970 to 25% in 1990 before it dropped to just the same as in 1990 in the last a decade respectively.
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type of transportation facilities
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to travel and return from workplace by the UK citizens in 1970, 1990 and 2000.

Overall
, there was a considerable increased in the usage of cars as a medium of transportation in the
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given
period. By contrast, the preference of biking
as well
as walking to the office
dramatically
declined in 1970 and 1990 onward.

First
and foremost, car usage which stood at 10
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percent
in the initial period,
gradually
uplifted to approximately 4 times higher in the
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end
of the
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given
sequence,
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beneath 40
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percent
of the average. Contrary, traveling by bikes and walking experienced a noticeable decreased over the year with about 33% of bikers and 35% walkers in 1990 onward.
Nevertheless
, the number of walking-workers somehow increased although
slightly
in 2000 to exactly 15
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percent
. Meanwhile, bikers continue to decline to reach
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just
after 5
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percent
of the average. The other type of transport, bus,
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showed
a fluctuation over the years. It
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started
with 20% in 1970 to 25% in 1990
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before
it dropped to
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the same as in 1990 in the last a decade
respectively
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IELTS academic The graph bellow shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in United Kingdom in 1970, 1990 and 2000.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
193 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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