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The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 word v.3

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period
The bar chart provides statistics on unemployment rates of graduates aged 20-24, in a European country in two years, 2008 and 2009. Generally, the percentage of unemployed male graduates tended to be higher than that of jobless female graduates during the duration of the survey. Between January and July in 2008, both genders experienced the same decline: from 10 percent to 7. 5 percent for men and from 7. 5 percent to 6 percent for women. Both subjects, then, rose to sudden peaks at October in the same year at 16% and 11% for men and women, respectively. The second half of the survey exhibited the same trend to an extent. In 2009, the figure for men reduced to 12 percent in January and after a slight fall in April and July to 11 percent, soared high to 22 percent in October whilst that for female graduates, while also decreasing to 8 percent in January and peaking at 14 percent in October, had one negligible reduction from January to April (from 8 percent to 6 percent, respectively) and one big leap from April to July (from 6 percent to 10 percent).
The bar chart provides statistics on unemployment rates of
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graduates
aged 20-24, in a European country in two years, 2008 and 2009.

Generally
, the percentage of unemployed male
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graduates
tended to be higher than that of jobless female
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graduates
during the duration of the survey.

Between January and July in 2008, both genders experienced the same decline: from 10
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percent
to 7. 5
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percent
for
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men
and from 7. 5
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percent
to 6
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percent
for women. Both subjects, then, rose to sudden peaks at October in the same year at 16% and 11% for
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men
and women,
respectively
.

The second half of the survey exhibited the same trend to an extent. In 2009, the figure for
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men
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reduced
to 12
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percent
in January and after a slight fall in April and July to 11
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percent
, soared high to 22
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percent
in October whilst that for female
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graduates
, while
also
decreasing to 8
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percent
in January and peaking at 14
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percent
in October, had one negligible reduction from January to April (from 8
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percent
to 6
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percent
,
respectively
) and one
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big
leap from April to July (from 6
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percent
to 10
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.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period

Academic
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4 paragraphs
191 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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