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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.34

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. v. 34
The economic advancement is perceived as the crucial goal by numerous government. it is arguably by many people because other sectors are reasonably essential for the country. this essay disagrees with the statement as that economic is mainly goals for the country improvement. economic sector is often seen as the only crucial matter for the country since the root of all problems facing by a nation is the failure of the economic status. The failing of nation’s economic sector would lead to the gravest problem such as monetary crisis and it could rapidly affect citizen life such as lost unemployment as well as increase the basic goods prize. If such issues happen, it will lead to other national difficulties such as poverty, criminality and so on. Therefore, most of the government in the world believed that improving economic sector means solving the country’s biggest issue. The proponent of this idea sees that other sectors such as education and health are equally important for one nation as the sectors are main factors to produce a good quality of human resources. Without providing proper education and health, the country would be lost its resources to develop the nation economic. Consequently, the improvement of the nation would not happen because it lacks of healthy and educated workforce. In my opinion, governments focusing on economic sector improvement as the nation’s main target is a biased view, since there are other sectors such as education and health which is equally important and need government' s attention.
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.
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sectors
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reasonably
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country
.
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essay disagrees with the statement as that
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economic
is
mainly
goals for the
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country
improvement.

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economic
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sector
is
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seen
as the
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only
crucial matter for the
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country
since the root of all problems facing by a
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nation
is the failure of the
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economic
status. The failing of
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nation’s
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economic
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sector
would lead to the gravest problem such as monetary crisis and it could
rapidly
affect citizen life such as lost unemployment
as well
as increase the basic
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goods
prize. If such issues happen, it will lead to
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other
national difficulties such as poverty, criminality and
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so
on.
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, most of the
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government
in the world believed that improving
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economic
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sector
means solving the
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country’s
biggest issue.

The proponent of this
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idea
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sees
that
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other
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sectors
such as education and health are
equally
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important
for one
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nation
as the
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sectors
are main factors to produce a
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good
quality of human resources. Without providing proper education and health, the
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country
would
be lost
its resources to develop the
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nation
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economic
.
Consequently
, the improvement of the
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nation
would not happen
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because
it lacks of healthy and educated workforce.

In my opinion,
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governments
focusing on
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economic
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sector
improvement as the
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nation’s
main target is a biased view, since there are
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other
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sectors
such as education and health which is
equally
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important
and need
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IELTS academic Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. v. 34

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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