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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005.
The pie chats elucidate the innovation of different kinds of cars used in the UK during the four decades from 1965 to 2005. It is evident that the most noticeable changes occurred for the dominant, private cars in comparison with other indicators. It witnessed a dramatic expansion in its rate from 47% to 74% over the decades. Likewise, the upward trend happened in the minority, recreational vehicles. The percentage of that had climbed to 9% from 4% during the period is shown. Nevertheless, in terms of public transport, a draft plunge can be seen in its percentage. It ranked second at 29% in 1965 before bottomed at 5% and became the least in 2005. Following the same pattern as that, lorries and other commercial cars fell to 12% with erratic fluctuation, where it, initially, stood at 20% in 1965. Overall, it can be seen that private cars are becoming the mainstream, following that, the recreational vehicles are developing but still take up a small space in total vehicles used in the UK over the 40 years.
The pie chats elucidate the innovation of
different
kinds of
cars
used
in the UK during the four decades from 1965 to 2005.

It is evident that the most noticeable
changes
occurred for the dominant, private
cars
in comparison
with other indicators. It witnessed a dramatic expansion in its rate from 47% to 74% over the decades.
Likewise
, the upward trend happened in the minority, recreational vehicles. The percentage of that had climbed to 9% from 4% during the period
is shown
.

Nevertheless
, in terms of public transport, a draft plunge can be
seen
in its percentage. It ranked second at 29% in 1965
before
bottomed at 5% and became the least in 2005.

Following the same pattern as that, lorries and other commercial
cars
fell to 12% with erratic fluctuation, where it,
initially
, stood at 20% in 1965.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that private
cars
are becoming the mainstream, following that, the recreational vehicles are developing
but
still
take up a
small
space in total vehicles
used
in the UK over the 40 years.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
176 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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