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The Internet is viewed as an excellent means pf communication by many. However, there are some who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

The Internet is viewed as an excellent means pf communication by many. However, there are some who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. v. 2
People of the world should thank the Internet for it' s immense contribution to the society as it has made our lives easier, faster and better. However, like everything has its negatives, Internet too has some drawbacks that alter our basic communication skills. Whether or not internet spoiling our communication skills is discussed below before giving final verdict. During early days, people had to wait for days to week to know the well-being of their beloved ones that live far away from them. But, today the story is entirely different and this is because of the internet becoming part of our life. It has made our lives so much better by decreasing the distance between the people and thus providing many advantages along with it. Few of such pros are chat forums, Messengers, chat rooms and video calling options that connect people globally and then enable to share information. Furthermore, these act as an excellent platform to showcase one' s linguistic talents and can also be used to improve it if one is lagging behind. Any language has to be polished with thorough practice and internet provides us the connection with people that are able to help. In contrast, many believe that communication skills was getting off the guard because of the Internet itself. Firstly, this is because of the shortcuts that people opt to use in chat which makes people to habituate to such formality and thus destroying the original language. Secondly, as internet offered online banking in order to pay bills and transactions etc. , on the fingertips, making people hardly to step out and talk to people on the way and around. Furthermore, inhibiting people to practice their skills as it is undergrounded. Finally, if people choose to or fail to communicate with people that possess less skills might not also help to the one that had intention to improve. In my opinion, i partially agree with both the arguments because when rightly used, the internet provides an excellent platform to learn communication skills. So, instead of using internet in such a way that lowers their skills in communication then it is by far better to choose ways in which they can improve.
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People
of the world should thank the Internet for
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#039; s immense contribution to the society as it has made our
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lives
easier, faster and better.
However
, like everything has its negatives, Internet too has
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some
drawbacks that alter our basic
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communication
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skills
.
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Whether or not
internet spoiling our
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communication
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skills
is discussed
below
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before
giving final verdict.

During early days,
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people
had to wait for days to week to know the well-being of their beloved ones that
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live
far away from them.
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But
,
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today
the story is
entirely
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different
and this is
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because
of the internet becoming part of our life. It has made our
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lives
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so
much better by decreasing the distance between the
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people
and
thus
providing
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many
advantages along with it. Few of such pros are chat forums, Messengers, chat rooms and video calling options that connect
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people
globally and then enable to share information.
Furthermore
, these act as an excellent platform to showcase
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one&
#039; s linguistic talents and can
also
be
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used
to
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improve
it if one is lagging behind. Any language
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has to
be polished
with thorough practice and internet provides us the connection with
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people
that are able to
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help
.

In contrast
,
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many
believe that
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communication
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skills
was getting off the guard
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because
of the Internet itself.
Firstly
, this is
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because
of the shortcuts that
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people
opt to
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use
in chat which
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makes
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people
to habituate to such formality and
thus
destroying the original language.
Secondly
, as internet offered online banking in order to pay bills and transactions etc.
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,
on the fingertips, making
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people
hardly to step out and talk to
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people
on the way and around.
Furthermore
, inhibiting
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people
to practice their
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skills
as it is
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undergrounded
.
Finally
, if
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people
choose to or fail to communicate with
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people
that possess
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less
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skills
might not
also
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help
to the one that had intention to
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improve
.

In my opinion,
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i
partially
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agree
with both the arguments
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because
when
rightly
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used
, the internet provides an excellent platform to learn
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communication
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skills
.
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So
,
instead
of using internet in such a way that lowers their
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skills
in
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communication
then it is by far better to choose ways in which they can
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improve
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The Internet is viewed as an excellent means pf communication by many. However, there are some who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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