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the graphs below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

the graphs below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012.
The graph depicts information about the quantity of books read by the males and females in bookstore at starmouth school between 2009 and 2012. In an overview, it can be noticed that, in the initial year girls preferred reading books more however, the trend seems to be opposite in the later year. As it is apparent from the figure that, girls read about 42 numbers of books from library in the year 2009, increased gradually to about 100 in the year 2011, then the trend declined significantly to around 80 in the year 2012. On the other hand boys, who read only 22 books that is half of the books read by the girls in 2009, tend to rise significantly and reached to the same number of book studied by ladies in 2011 which is 100, again DOS dramatically to 140 in the later year.
The graph depicts information about the quantity of
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by the males and females in bookstore at
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starmouth
school between 2009 and 2012.

In an overview, it can
be noticed
that, in the initial
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year
girls preferred reading
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books
more
however
, the trend seems to be opposite in the later year.

As it is apparent from the figure that, girls
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read
about 42 numbers of
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books
from library in the
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year
2009, increased
gradually
to about 100 in the
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year
2011, then the trend declined
significantly
to around 80 in the
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year
2012.

On the other hand
boys, who
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read
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only
22
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books
that is
half of the
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books
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read
by the girls in 2009, tend to rise
significantly
and reached to the same number of
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book
studied by ladies in 2011 which is 100, again DOS
dramatically
to 140 in the later
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year
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic the graphs below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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