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The illustrations shows how chocolate is produced
The process chart illustrates the production of chocolate in ten stages. Overall, it is immediately apparent from the process chart that initially cocoa tree is grown and culminating in production of liquid chocolate after following significant procedure As a first stage, red pods are ripen from the cocoa tree which are grown in S. America, Africa and Indonesia. After harvesting of pods the white cocoa beans are gathered. Next, the beans are fermented. Moving further, the fermented beans are spread in the direct sunlight for drying. After drying process, the beans are put in large sacks for the purpose of transportation. The large number of sacks are then transported by train or lorry. The sacks are taken to the factory for further procedure. The prepared beans are roasted at severe temperature of about 350' c. Further, the outer shell is removed from the by product and the beans are crushed in the following step. In the final stage, the inner part of beans are pressed in a distinct machine and consequently liquid chocolate is produced.
The process chart illustrates the production of chocolate in ten stages.

Overall
, it is immediately apparent from the process chart that
initially
cocoa tree
is grown
and culminating in production of liquid chocolate after following significant procedure

As a
first
stage, red pods are
ripen
from the cocoa tree which
are grown
in S. America, Africa and Indonesia.
After
harvesting of pods the white cocoa
beans
are gathered
.
Next
, the
beans
are fermented
. Moving
further
, the fermented
beans
are spread
in the direct sunlight for drying. After drying process, the
beans
are put
in large sacks for the purpose of transportation.

The large number of sacks are then transported by train or lorry. The sacks
are taken
to the factory for
further
procedure.
The
prepared
beans
are roasted
at severe temperature of about 350' c.
Further
, the outer shell
is removed
from the by product and the
beans
are crushed
in the following step. In the final stage, the inner part of
beans
are pressed
in a distinct machine and
consequently
liquid chocolate
is produced
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The illustrations shows how chocolate is produced

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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